What is your opinion on the security and convenience of online shopping?
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Everyone knows the convenience of online shopping.
Because we can shop anytime, anywhere and buy the things we want without being disturbed by time and place. I agree.
But I don\'t think the security of online shopping is good.
These days, personal information is becoming sensitive and I think a lot about its importance because it is vulnerable in that field. I can say that it is not good because there are more and more crimes where someone hacks, peeks at my shopping records, steals personal information and even steals information on important payment methods.
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Everyone knows the convenience of online shopping.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Everyone is aware of the convenience of online shopping.
Because we can shop anytime, anywhere and buy the things we want without being disturbed by time and place. I agree.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I agree since online shopping lets us buy things whenever and wherever we want.
But I don\'t think the security of online shopping is good.
>> CORRECT.
These days, personal information is becoming sensitive and I think a lot about its importance because it is vulnerable in that field.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: These days, personal information is very sensitive, so I think a lot about its importance because it can easily be exposed or misused online.
I can say that it is not good because there are more and more crimes where someone hacks, peeks at my shopping records, steals personal information and even steals information on important payment methods.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I think it is not very safe because there are increasing cases of hacking, stolen personal information, leaked shopping records, and even payment information theft.
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