Which memory do you think shaped your personality the most?
학생이 쓴 원문
When I was nine or ten years old, I lost the money envelope that is monthly fee for school bus near my house.
I was shocked and I changed my personality from then.
I got a habit that checking my wallet and money frequently.
강사 첨삭
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~~Teacher Ryka^^
When I was nine or ten years old, I lost the money envelope that is monthly fee for school bus near my house.
>> When I was nine or ten years old, I lost the money envelope that contained the monthly school bus fee near my house.
I was shocked and I changed my personality from then.
>> I was shocked, and my personality changed after that incident.
I got a habit that checking my wallet and money frequently.
>> Since then, I developed the habit of checking my wallet and money frequently.
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