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QUESTION: Is perfection something to be admired or sought after? Plan and write an essay of not more than 10 sentences in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.
perfection is one of the important factors in our life. We have to try makeing our life,work and evrythings prefect. On working, I saw someone who are tring working hard. He think that working perfectly is very important. the result, He always are respected by all. people trust him. absolutley, His perfection makes him very tired. but In our world need people like him. so I think that perfection is something to be admired.
thank you for reading my sentences. I think there are many wrong sentences. Please check and let me know rightly. BYE. ^^
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Hello there Ms. [Name]!
Happy Friday! How are you?
Thank you for writing in our composition board.
Thank you for writing in our composition board.
I loved reading about your opinion and your example.
Good job! ^_^
Please continue practicing and continue writing.
See you again on Monday.
Have a happy weekend.
Take care always.
~Teacher Charry :)
perfection is one of the important factors in our life. >> Perfection is one of the important factors in our life.
We have to try makeing our life,work and evrythings prefect.
>> We have to try making our life, work and everything prefect.
On working, I saw someone who are tring working hard.
>> At work, I saw someone who was trying to work hard.
He think that working perfectly is very important.
>> He thinks that working perfectly is very important.
the result, He always are respected by all.
>> As a result, he is always respected by all.
people trust him.
>> People trust him.
absolutley, His perfection makes him very tired.
>> Aiming towards perfection absolutely makes him tired.
but In our world need people like him.
>> But in our world, we need people like him.
so I think that perfection is something to be admired.
>> So I think perfection is something to be admired.
thank you for reading my sentences.
>> So I think perfection is something to be admired.
thank you for reading my sentences.
>> Thank you for reading my sentences.
I think there are many wrong sentences.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I think there are a lot of errors in my sentences.
Please check and let me know rightly.
>> Please check them and let me know the correct sentences.
BYE. ^^
>> Bye. ^^
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