[이름]mework
학생이 쓴 원문
It is my opinion about what you asked me.
Q: Do you think human beings need to work to be happy? Why or why not?
A: Of course It is right. Everybody want to achieve their\'s own dream. To do that, We have to working hard.
If we souldn\'t working any more, temporalily feels be nice but it is not sustainable.
강사 첨삭
Good evening, [이름]. Thank you for sharing your opinion about what I asked you. Great job!^_^
Of course It is right.
>>>Of course it is right.
Everybody want to achieve their\'s own dream.
>>>Everybody wants to achieve their own dreams.
To do that, We have to working hard.
>>>In order reach that, we have to work hard.
If we souldn\'t working any more, temporalily feels be nice but it is not sustainable.
>>>If we s[이름]uldn\'t work anymore, it temporarily feels nice but it is not sustainable.
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