[이름]\'s Diary

2019-03-05 · 첨삭 강사 Gina

학생이 쓴 원문

Hi my name is [이름]! I finished school late today. I made 10 friends. I had a class class with my teachers. I learned about the teachers through the class. The teachers were fun. I also learned about my friends. I\'m happy because I went home with two friends. I want to have many friends.

강사 첨삭

Good evening, [이름]!


Thank you for submitting your entry today for your diary.

I\'m glad that today was a better day for you.

You\'re a friendly person so I believe that you will be having many friends.

I\'m also happy that you\'re enjoying school. ^^


~Teacher Gina



Hi my name is [이름]!
>> CORRECT.

>> Or: Hi, this is [이름]!

>> Or: Hi, I am [이름]!


 I finished school late today.

>> CORRECT.

>> Or: My class ended late today.

 I made 10 friends.

>> CORRECT.

>> Or: I was able to meet 10 new friends.

 I had a class class with my teachers.

>> I had a class with my teachers.

>> Or: I attended a class with my teachers.

 I learned about the teachers through the class.

>> CORRECT.

>> Or: I got to know more about the teachers because of the class.

 The teachers were fun.

>> CORRECT.

>> Or: The teachers were very enjoyable to be with.

 I also learned about my friends.

>> CORRECT.

>> Or: I also got to know more about my friends.

 I\'m happy because I went home with two friends.

>> I\'m happy because I went home with two of my friends.


 I want to have many friends.

>> CORRECT.

>> Or: I want to gain many friends.

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