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2018-11-27 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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I think people who strive to maintain a successful career and happy family life at the same time don't exists mostly , except noble family. Many people want to have happy family and successful life. To possess it, people have to try always and need to some heritage. These days, Korea's economy is very hard. So it affects my husband business. So my husband is depressed. My husband's hope is maintain a successful career and happy family life at the same time. He thinks the best of life is family. But nowadays since the economy situration , he is very stressful.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, [이름]!

I appreciate your effort in doing your homework :)

Please explain this tomorrow: To possess it, people always have to try. (and need to some heritage?)

In everything that we do, balance is really important^^

See you!

I think people who strive to maintain a successful career and happy family life at the same time don\'t exists mostly , except noble family.
>>
I think people who strive to maintain a successful career and happy family life at the same time don\'t exist, except noble families.
Many people want to have happy family and successful life.
>>
Many people want to have a happy family and a successful life.
To possess it, people have to try always and need to some heritage.
>>To possess it, people
always have to try. (and need to some heritage?)
These days, Korea\'s economy is very hard. So it affects my husband business. So my husband is depressed.
>>These days, Korea\'s economy is having a hard time, so it affects my husband\'s business, and he
is depressed.  
My husband\'s hope is maintain a successful career and happy family life at the same time.

>>My husband\'s hope is to maintain a successful career and happy family life at the same time.

 He thinks the best of life is family.
>>
 He thinks the best in life is family.
But nowadays since the economy situration , he is very stressful.

>>But nowadays, due to the economic situation, he is very stressed.


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