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2018-11-29 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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I don't eat fast food well. When I'm on the way go travel or sepcial day, I eat it. Of course, fast food tastes good. Before my husband was not married, he often ate it. Because he told that it provided very quickly and the food was simple. Not all people was fat and high cholesterol due to fast food. But the pople who very often have a fast food are mostly fat and not health. Just in my think. It is not good what have a fast food very often.

강사 첨삭

Good morning, [이름]! How are you?

It is undeniable that fast food dishes like hamburger, French fries, and fried chicken are delectable~!

However, we should eat them in moderation^^

Have a great day, see you tomorrow!

I don\'t eat fast food well. When I\'m on the way go travel or sepcial day, I eat it.
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I don\'t eat fast food well. When I\'m traveling or it\'s a special day, I eat it.
Of course, fast food tastes good.

>>CORRECT!

Before my husband was not married, he often ate it.

>>CORRECT!

Because he told that it provided very quickly and the food was simple.
>>
Because he told me that it could be provided very quickly and the food was simple.
Not all people was fat and high cholesterol due to fast food.
>>
Not all people are fat and have high cholesterol due to fast food.
But the pople who very often have a fast food are mostly fat and not health.

>>However, the people who often have fast food are mostly fat and not healthy.

 Just in my think.
>>It is just my opinion.
It is not good what have a fast food very often.

>>It is not good to have fast food very often.


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