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2018-12-27 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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I prefer safety about property. Of course, long years ago, I bought a apartment and rent to someone. I received monthly rent from them and I repaid loan. After years, I sold a apartment. At that time, I repaid all loan and save the money ,as well. Likewise, investing it somewhere is more efficient than save money in the bank. Because in the bank's interest is very low. Even though I don't have a lot money, if I have a lot money, I'll invest real estate.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]. Thank you once again for this. I heard, investing in real estate is the trend today because prices of houses and buildings are increasing over time. I would invest in real estate as well if I had the money.

- T. Beth

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I prefer safety about property.
>>>  CORRECT.

Of course, long years ago, I bought a apartment and rent to someone.
>>> Of course, long time ago, I bought an apartment and had it rented out by someone else.   
I received monthly rent from them and I repaid loan.
>>> CORRECT.

>>> I received monthly rent from them and I used that to repay my loan.
 After years, I sold a apartment.

>>> After some time, I sold the apartment.  

At that time, I repaid all loan and save the money ,as well.
>>> At that time, I repaid all the loan and was able to save money as well.
Likewise, investing it somewhere is more efficient than save money in the bank.

>>> Investing it somewhere is more efficient than just saving the money in the bank.  

Because in the bank\'s interest is very low.
>>> Because the interest in the bank is very low. 
Even though I don\'t have a lot money, if I have a lot money, I\'ll invest real estate.

>>> Even though I don\'t have a lot money, but if I do, I\'ll invest in real estate.  

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